I liked #22 the best because they brought up a lot of really good points that I would like to see implemented into this school. I really agree that teachers should not hand out extra credit passes during the school year and the bathrooms should also get some music or white noise playing in them.
I think #22 is the best because they have a lot of great points and have good explanations for them.
I think #22 is the best one out of all of them. Reason for that is because that none of them really got me saying that's a good idea and this and that and one on 22 was music in the bathroom I really liked that idea in the bathroom. I think it would less weird and less stress full for everyone.
I liked #24 the most because it had the best rights and was good written.
I like #21 the most because they elaborated on their rights more than the others, which made me think it was the best out of all of them.
I think #22 is the best one of this set because it has original ideas and it has great evidence backing it up.
I liked #22 the best!
#21 - Need more evidence for major points. Writer vacillates between "I" and "we" a lot which hurts the consistency. Lots of comma mistakes. Ends with "We the students of the school's all the United States." The issues addressed are specific to spring valley so I don't think this fits.
#22 - Overall very strong. No major errors. Comma usage is a little iffy but does very well in the categorys that others struggle.
#23 - No major issues. The ideas were not very original. Good grammar but there are still a few mistakes.
#24 - Grammar is fine. Ideas are very unoriginal.
#25 - Need more evidence for points and go into more detail about ideas.
I'm going to have to choose #22 because they brought up the most original and well-supported points. All of the people in this group could use some work on their grammar and writing format. #22 made the least amount of grammatical errors.
#21- Had some good points, but the explanations really contradicted themselves when the writer wanted to start school later but also said that students would be willing to start earlier in the day for earlier sports practice. Also lots of simple spelling and grammar mistakes.
#22 Original points and strong explanations. Only a few spelling mistakes
#23 Could use stronger explanations
#24 Could have more concrete ideas, but overall it was good
#25 Good points but needs better explanations
Overall I thought that #22 was the best
I think #22 was the best. I think #22 was the best because it was well structured and it had all the right things that are going on in our school. The way they worded the paragraphs made everything flow together. Overall #22 was very well written and was the best.
I think 24 is the best because it had the fewest spelling mistakes and they asked for more reasonable changes.
#22 in my opinion be the best teen declaration. #22 brought up many valid points that effect our school and give explanation to why we need a change and how that change can be possible.
I liked #22 the best because they had some really good points. They had unique ideas which was more interesting to read rather than the others.
21- A few spelling errors, you should go through and correct those. You had some good points, but most of them were generic ideas.
22- A few spelling errors, you should go through and correct those. You had very good points that were unique and not generic.
23- Had some really good points, but most were generic. You also had a few mistakes throughout the paper, you should go back and correct those.
24- Had a lot of really good points, only had one point that was generic. You explained your ideas really well, although you had a few run on sentences throughout the paper.
25- You had some random highlighting throughout paper which was confusing. You need to go into more detail on all of the points you brought up, your points were very dry .You had some spelling errors, you should go back and correct those.
#22 was by far the best because every point brought up was relevant to the everyday life of the students in Spring Valley. The point brought up about bra straps in an everyday struggle for most girls in SV. It is not that we are trying to dress inappropriately, it's that now days it is difficult to find clothes that don't show your shoulders. That is just the fashion that is around these days and I think that #22 covers that very well.
I like #24 because I think you should get credits for working because not everybody works and tries to manage homework at the same time.
I think #22 was the best by a large margin. #22 covers multiple good topics and has good evidence for each topic. Each topic also starts with a funny opening line to start the paragraph such as "chocolate milk doesn't come from brown cows", and "bra straps are not satan's work". #22 was the best one in my opinion.
I though #22 was the best written declaration. Reason for this is because the points made sense and I could relate to the feeling that the things that were stated need to be changed. Another reason why #22 was the best is because the use of words and how nicely everything flowed together was nice because it was easy to read and not choppy like some of the other declarations.
I think #22 was the best because they brought up a lot of good pionts and the brown cow joke at the beginnig was the best
I liked #22 and #24 the best
21) The ideas were okay, but they way it was written out was done poorly. Like, it was kind of funny, but other than that it was difficult to read.
22) I liked this a lot. It had a lot of creative arguments and original ideas, with a lot of funny things slipped into it.
23) This was just one long run on sentence. They used the word "I" a lot which makes no sense, it just seemed like they were getting personally angry while they were writing. It's trash, but it has potential to be good.
24) Kinda boring to read, but it has a lot of good points that I relate with.
25) This was okay, there was nothing particularly good or bad about it, it just existed.