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Teen Declarations Group #6

12/13/2017

15 Comments

 
#26
#27
#28
#29

15 Comments
sam webster
12/13/2017 08:19:00 am

i liked number 26 it was relatable and it made a lot of sense and it seemed really easy to read. all the other ones made great points and i agree with them too like the towels for the girls and stuff but 26 was the easiest for me to read

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Reyna
12/13/2017 08:23:47 am

I liked #27 because they had pretty relatable, the person had a lot of good points with good explanations to go with it, and they also had good responsibilities that the students would have to go with it.

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Devan M.
12/13/2017 08:26:02 am

I liked number 29 the best because they talked about putting more food in the vending machines and they talked about bringing back economics class which I never got to experience but I think that would be a class to take.

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henry rabitoy
12/13/2017 12:19:45 pm

i agree with 29 it seems to be the most logical and supportive of the ideals i stand for and the concepts they bring up like to vending machine being better stocked and bringing chocolate milk back is one of the best ideas i have read today.

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Hannah Hagen
12/13/2017 12:28:50 pm

I think #26 was the best Teen Declaration. I think that a vast majority of the high school, and even middle school could relate to it. School is a big thing that is apart of our life and I think that it should be more flexible since we spend so much time going to school and working on it.

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Blake link
12/14/2017 06:30:00 am

26- Ideas were boring and wording sounded try-hard.
27- Boring, unoriginal ideas that are vague
28- writing looks pre-elementary, sloppy and inconsistent use of grammar
29- More boring ideas but this is the least worse of them all. Good grammar, formatted nice, and the ideas are explained well. ********

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Michael Laffin
12/14/2017 06:40:38 am

I enjoyed #28 the most. Not only did it discuss problems relatable to the average high school student, but brought with it an amusing satire style of writing that made the reading lighthearted and enjoyable.

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Haley Graham
12/14/2017 06:51:48 am

#26- Use quotations when quoting someone
-use specific examples for clubs and sports
-If you're athletic that doesn't mean you automatically get good grades
-Students in sports aren't allowed to fail classes, they can be getting a D in a class and have a warning from the coach but still participate
#27- Go a little more in depth about some topics
#28- Point V has no evidence or any requests for anything
#29- Well done with lots of evidence and things in exchange for what they want, I vote for this one.

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Kristine Miller
12/14/2017 07:36:26 am

Of all these submissions, I found #26 to be the best. It was well worded, had good structured, and easy to connect with what the writer was saying. For example, I think the robot analogy is understandable and very true because that really is what it feels like to be at school sometimes.

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Jackson Brink
12/14/2017 07:43:06 am

I liked 29 the best because I like the fact that there should be more food in our vending machines so that we high schools can have more of a variety than just the usual 3 choices we get.

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Alyssa Hinzman
12/15/2017 07:17:38 am

I think #26 was the best, I believe that most teens could relate to this.

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Hunter White
12/15/2017 08:56:11 am

I liked #26 the best because we are programmed like robots. We are controlled by a bell that makes noise. The system should be more flexible.

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Isabelle Peterson
12/15/2017 09:45:42 am

I really liked #26 because of its detailed examples and the amount of reasons given. The author is slightly biased towards certain subjects, but that just add to their own point of view. The whole things was pretty easy to understand, and the points are easily reached. I also agree with some of their points and it speaks to me on a personal level.

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Jonathan Corriea
12/15/2017 09:47:05 am

My favorite out of the four was #26. Not only was it the most logical of the four it was the most well written. I found grammatical and some spelling errors in the other three. #26 seemed to have a lot of thought put into it and it was a good read.

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Luke Hagen
12/15/2017 10:17:06 am

My favorite of the four submissions was number 29 because they talk about the schools vending machines and how students want more than just cheese curds, adding more items would also benefit the school. Another thing I like is they talked about the home economics class, I agree with them because instead of us learning equations and boring facts we could be learning how to cook for when we get out into the real world. Also it would eventually lead to us being healthier because we would be able to make homemade food and not just box food you put in the microwave.

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